Night Sail
Phosphorescent stars
cast a wide lighted net
A wave of clouds
is breaking
Washed up
moon shell
Lifts your gaze
Turn your ear
towards its shine
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Phosphorescent stars
cast a wide lighted net
A wave of clouds
is breaking
Washed up
moon shell
Lifts your gaze
Turn your ear
towards its shine
Comments
Beautiful Colleen. Another day of missing the sea for me.
Posted by: Kat Campbell | June 30, 2007 12:23 PM
I love the last line idea! I can hear the ocean ...or ah...the moon shining!
Posted by: Ruth | June 30, 2007 9:29 PM
That photo is too good.
Very good verse too. I love verses in any form.
Michele says hello along with me.
Posted by: gautami | June 30, 2007 11:33 PM
Powerful words wrapped around a powerful image. You never cease to move your readers, Colleen.
I wish you safe travels, a fulfilling time in your hometown, and a safe return.
Posted by: Carmi | June 30, 2007 11:36 PM
...as does Michele. She appreciates great art as much as anyone I know.
Posted by: Carmi | June 30, 2007 11:37 PM
Great the way you juxtaposed the images in the photo with the words of the ocean.
Posted by: Tabor | July 1, 2007 8:01 AM
Lovely in all ways!
Posted by: Leslie | July 1, 2007 10:48 AM
Love the revision, Colleen--though I still think it could be a haiku or a tanka! :)
Hope you're enjoying the ocean.
Posted by: Mara | July 1, 2007 7:38 PM
OOOOHHHH...this one is VERY nice, picture AND writing.
Posted by: Deana | July 1, 2007 10:23 PM
Love the last verse of this poem. Absolutely beautiful. Stopped by to wish you a happy July 4th! And to let you know that there's something waiting for you on my site . . . congrats!
Take Care, XINE
Posted by: Christine | July 3, 2007 1:12 AM